First of all, uniforms deny students the right of self expression. There is a need to encourage independence among the students, and uniforms disallow them that self- expression. Some of the opponents of uniform argue that, forcing students to wear uniforms can make them unruly as they may turn to unsuitable mode of dressing. Uniforms hamper a smooth transition of students from childhood to adulthood as their socialization is practically controlled. Uniforms may also be a probable source of uneasiness for students considering that; they need to make maximum use of their time in schools.
Striking problems are a tired, like-everyone-else’s opening that will not catch the reader or let the reader know right away there is an interesting voice in this piece; a weak ending; a bit of rambling or disorder in the whole essay; and spots where there is need for more vivid and specific detail. There may also be more of a sense of describing what happened than explaining why this trip was significant—a question of the right emphasis. It is also a bit too long. Its’ okay to go over 500 words, but not 200 words over, especially if there are sections that can be left out.